Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country.

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Nowadays, governments look forward to prosperity and progress for their countries. There have been conflicting views on whether development in the economic sector only is enough or
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whether improvement
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of other aspects is a necessity too. In my opinion, political and social progression is as equal
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the economic aspect. On the one hand, developing the economy of a
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has various privileges. The
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will be able to provide enough financial support for
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citizens.
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, if there is an increase in the general income, people will receive convenient salaries.
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, taxes will be reduced as the
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has other sources of funding
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as major projects and
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fund
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from investors.
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improving the economy can be
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sole goal to be achieved.
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, other factors are necessary
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category. The most significant one is reinforcing
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political matters which can have positive effects on the overall
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's development
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strengthening the stability of the government in the world.
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, prosperity can be reached.
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, the social life, when it is added to the plan of improvement,
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can allow people to have their needs met, which in turn will encourage them to work hard for their communities.
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, not only progressing financially is required but
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politically and socially. In conclusion, all ways of progression are necessary including finance, politics and society. The debate regarding which direction is
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appropriate for governments to prosper will continue.
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, they should not focus on one category only to improve.
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