Some people feel that boarding schools (where students or pupils live at the school during the term) are an excellent option for children, while other people disagree for a number of reasons. Consider both sides of this debate and reach a conclusion.

Nowadays it has been a well-discussed topic either
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should go to boarding schools or
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assist
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essay will examine both
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of view
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taking
children
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putting juveniles in boarding
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are in these places they will have more tools to develop their academic skills
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as maths,
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economy
,
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and literature
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due to they will spend
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time with
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teachers together with their colleagues.
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, all of them will be equal and
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, there will be no discrimination among them.
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these minors don't fall
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addictions or
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illnesses
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illnesses
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live would be an amazing place
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children
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orphaned or those who have problems with their parents.
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the other hand, I
also
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because
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there are
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several
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several
activities to do, and it is important for them to know other people.
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recommend
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recommend
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them to clubs, or
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a guitar
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lesson
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to encourage them to do different activities.
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, staying in the same place
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would be stressful for them
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it may cause
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them
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drop out
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.
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, the same routine might produces harder problems in the education of
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and higher dropout rates. To conclude,
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the
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boarding schools can be a solution
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children
that have harmful
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behaviour
behaviur
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behaviour
,
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medium term
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school have better results than
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establishments
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the
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society
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society
. I for that reason that all these benefits outweigh its drawback
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