Some people feel that boarding schools (where students or pupils live at the school during the term) are an excellent option for children, while other people disagree for a number of reasons. Consider both sides of this debate and reach a conclusion.
Nowadays it has been a well-discussed topic either
children
should go to boarding schools or Change to a singular noun
child
assit
to normal institutes. Correct your spelling
assist
This
essay will examine both point
of view Change to a plural noun
points
of
taking Change preposition
on
children
to different educational places and will bring a conclusion.
The two main advantages for
putting juveniles in boarding Change preposition
of
school
are in these places they will have more tools to develop their academic skills Fix the agreement mistake
schools
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such
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as maths, Correct your spelling
such
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economy
literature
due to they will spend Correct word choice
and literature
much
time with Correct quantifier usage
a lot of
his
teachers together with their colleagues. Correct pronoun usage
their
In addition
, all of them will be equal and then
, there will be no discrimination among them. Second
, they will stay away from drugs so this
generate
these minors don't fall Replace the word
generation
in
addictions or Change preposition
into
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illnesses
ilnesses
. Correct your spelling
illnesses
For example
: the pupils
live would be an amazing place Change noun form
pupil's
pupils'
to
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for
children
are
orphaned or those who have problems with their parents.
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who are
In
the other hand, I Change preposition
On
also
think that children
should have a life outside of schools
because Fix the agreement mistake
school
of
there are Change preposition
apply
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several
severel
activities to do, and it is important for them to know other people. Correct your spelling
several
In addition
, i
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I
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recommend
recomend
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recommend
to Take
them to clubs, or Change the verb form
taking
guitar
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a guitar
lesson
to encourage them to do different activities. Fix the agreement mistake
lessons
Second
, staying in the same place all days
would be stressful for them Fix the agreement mistake
every day
therefore
it may cause that
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apply
them
drop out Change the pronoun
they
school
. Change preposition
of school
In other words
, the same routine might produces harder problems in the education of children
,
and higher dropout rates.
To conclude, Remove the comma
apply
Although
is Add an article
the truth
a truth
truth
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true
the
boarding schools can be a solution Correct your spelling
that
to
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for
children
that have harmful Correct your spelling
behaviour
behaviur
, Correct your spelling
behaviour
the
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apply
medium term
school have better results than Add a hyphen
medium-term
pupils
establishments Change noun form
pupils'
pupil's
on
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in
the
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apply
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society
sociaty
. I for that reason that all these benefits outweigh its drawbackCorrect your spelling
society
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