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Some people feel that boarding schools (where students or pupils live at the school during the term) are an excellent option for children, while other people disagree for a number of reasons. Consider both sides of this debate and reach a conclusion.

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Nowadays it has been a well-discussed topic either
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children
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 should go to boarding schools or
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assist
 to normal institutes.
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 of view
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on
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 taking
children
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 to different educational places and will bring a conclusion. The two main advantages
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of
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 putting juveniles in boarding
school
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schools
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 are in these places they will have more tools to develop their academic skills
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such
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such
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 as maths,
ecomony
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economy
,
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and literature
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 due to they will spend
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a lot of
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 teachers together with their colleagues.
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, all of them will be equal and
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, there will be no discrimination among them.
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, they will stay away from drugs so
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generate
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 these minors don't fall
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 addictions or
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illnesses
ilnesses
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illnesses
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: the
pupils
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pupil's
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 live would be an amazing place
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children
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are
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who are
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 orphaned or those who have problems with their parents.
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 the other hand, I
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 think that
children
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 should have a life outside of
schools
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 because
of
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there are
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several
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several
 activities to do, and it is important for them to know other people.
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,
i
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recommend
recomend
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recommend
to Take
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taking
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 them to clubs, or
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a guitar
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lesson
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 to encourage them to do different activities.
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, staying in the same place
all days
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every day
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 would be stressful for them
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 it may cause
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them
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they
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 drop out
school
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of school
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.
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, the same routine might produces harder problems in the education of
children
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,
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 and higher dropout rates. To conclude,
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 is
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the truth
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truth
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the
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that
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 boarding schools can be a solution
to
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for
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children
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 that have harmful
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behaviour
behaviur
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behaviour
,
the
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medium term
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 school have better results than
pupils
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pupils'
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 establishments
on
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in
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the
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society
sociaty
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society
. I for that reason that all these benefits outweigh its drawback
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