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Some people believe that kids today are more protected than earlier generations. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this view?

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 protection is a topic many people in the world are talking about today. It affects
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 in various ways. In my opinion, I believe that the advantages of
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 protection outweigh the drawback.
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essay I will explore both aspects, and demonstrate why proponents are correct. On the
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 hand ,some groups of people believe that
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 earlier more protected than today's generation. I often disagree with that view. Because in past, technology didn't develop.
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, there was no mobile phone, roods,proper school, hospital,roods.. etc. so
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 were playing with their friends in the jungle.
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 have no time to look out for them. So they didn't know what happen or their
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 while playing.
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 were playing with their friends in the jungle.
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 was falling down and he had an injury on his leg. So their
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 take quick treatment of him. But there were no vehicles and well-developed roads.
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 they got some time to give him treatment. Looking at the above facts, it appears that there is a negative aspect of
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 prostration earlier.
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, there is a number of arguments in favour of my knowledge.
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 of the most preponderant ones is that we always can find out about our
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. Because in the modern world there are so many facilities
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 as mobile phones, CCTV cameras,medicine, school, and roads
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. We can take care of our
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 using the above aspects.
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 who were kidnapping. So
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 worry about that and are informed that to police can find that
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 using CCTV cameras or mobile conversations. So
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 can find their
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 easily. But it wasn't like that before or it's very hard to do. In view of the argument outlined above,
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 can conclude that despite having some drawbacks the benefits of
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 protection today are at a very good level to the earlier generations.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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