Some people think that dangerous sports should be banned, while others think people should be free to choose. Discuss both views and give your option.
All around the world, sport is considered an important part of society. While some
people
support the banning of dangerous athletics, Correct pronoun usage
others
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others
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others
other
believe it should be up to personal Fix the agreement mistake
others
choice
. Although
there are serious consequences to unsafe games, this
essay will discuss why individuals should have the option whether
to participate in these activities or not.
Considering the negative effects hazardous Change preposition
of whether
sports
can have, it is understandable why some hold the view such
sports
should be illegal. Long-lasting injuries that can be sustained in chancy sports
, is
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are
such
an example and is certainly valid thus
needs to be recognized. A research study conducted by Melbourne University, Correct word choice
and thus
for instance
, confirmed boxers who has
been participating in Change the verb form
have
this
sport for a prolonged period has
a higher likelihood of developing serious brain injuries or neurological deficits Correct subject-verb agreement
have
such
as Dementia. However
, despite substantial evidence, to prohibit
a leisure activity would not guarantee the absence of Change the verb form
prohibiting
athletes
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athletes'
athlete's
participation
in them.
Replace the word
participating
People
appreciate having the option to make decisions based on what they believe is entertaining or recreational and can make informed
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the informed
an informed
choice
even Fix the agreement mistake
choices
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though
tough
there are risks involved. Correct your spelling
though
In other words
, whereas a spectator watching a football game personally encourage aggressive behavior
as part of Change the spelling
behaviour
entertainment
or the players themselves find playing the physically challenging game as recreational, it should be within their right to make that Add an article
the entertainment
an entertainment
choice
. Government regulations can negotiate stricter rules in dangerous sports
to mitigate the risks involved in order to protect individual
right to practice Add an article
an individual
the individual
such
activities.
In conclusion, there are people
supporting the option of dangerous sports
being played, rather than being banned. Irrespective of the risks involved with dangerous sports
, people
should have the freedom of choice
to participate or not.Submitted by dorethefer on
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