Some people think that dangerous sports should be banned, while others think people should be free to choose. Discuss both views and give your option.

All around the world, sport is considered an important part of society. While some
people
support the banning of dangerous athletics,
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believe it should be up to personal
choice
.
Although
there are serious consequences to unsafe games,
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to participate in these activities or not. Considering the negative effects hazardous
sports
can have, it is understandable why some hold the view
such
sports
should be illegal. Long-lasting injuries that can be sustained in chancy
sports
,
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such
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needs to be recognized. A research study conducted by Melbourne University,
for instance
, confirmed boxers who
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been participating in
this
sport for a prolonged period
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a higher likelihood of developing serious brain injuries or neurological deficits
such
as Dementia.
However
, despite substantial evidence,
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a leisure activity would not guarantee the absence of
athletes
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participation
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in them.
People
appreciate having the option to make decisions based on what they believe is entertaining or recreational and can make
informed
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choice
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there are risks involved.
In other words
, whereas a spectator watching a football game personally encourage aggressive
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as part of
entertainment
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the entertainment
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or the players themselves find playing the physically challenging game as recreational, it should be within their right to make that
choice
. Government regulations can negotiate stricter rules in dangerous
sports
to mitigate the risks involved in order to protect
individual
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an individual
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right to practice
such
activities. In conclusion, there are
people
supporting the option of dangerous
sports
being played, rather than being banned. Irrespective of the risks involved with dangerous
sports
,
people
should have the freedom of
choice
to participate or not.
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