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The plans below show the site of a farm in 1950 and the same site today.

The two maps illustrate the transformation of Beechwood
Farm
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 between 1950 and the present day.
Overall
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, the site has been substantially redeveloped from an agricultural property into a tourist-oriented facility.
While
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 numerous visitor amenities have been introduced, several original farming features have been retained in their initial locations. In 1950, the
farm
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 was structured primarily for agricultural production. The northeastern section was designated for sheep grazing,
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 areas for cultivating fruit trees, soft fruits, and vegetables occupied the central and southern portions of the site. A
farmhouse
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 and barn were positioned in the western area, with a chicken enclosure situated to the south of the
farmhouse
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. A network of tracks connected these various zones, facilitating movement across the property. By the present day, the site has undergone extensive modifications to accommodate tourism. The original tracks have been upgraded to paved roads, and the sheep grazing area has been completely removed. New facilities include a
farm
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 shop located near the entrance, two designated car parks, a camping field equipped with tents in the northeastern section, and several holiday cottages. Solar panels have been installed, and a substantial tree now stands in the northern area. The barn has been relocated to a position southwest of the
farmhouse
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.
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, the
farmhouse
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 itself, the chicken enclosure, and the fruit and vegetable cultivation zones have remained unchanged in their original locations, preserving some continuity with the
farm
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's agricultural heritage.

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task
Add a final line that restates the main change from farm to tourist site.
coherence
Use clear sign words and keep a steady flow in each paragraph to guide the reader.
content
Clear view of change from old farm to new site.
structure
Good time words to mark old and new times.
content
Many details show how the place kept some old parts while adding new ones.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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