private transport is creating problems for people. what are these problems and how we can solve this

Transportations
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owned by
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an individual
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individual
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is starting to generate problems for the people.
Moreover
,
this
issue does not come from one point of source, it is already noticed that there are
a
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whole systems that
supporting
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the usage of
private
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a private
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vehicle
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.
First
, the problem of individual-owned
transportation
is
the
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pollutions
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pollution
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. These
pollutions
come in a form of sound, air, and sometimes water
pollutions
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pollution
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. The sound
pollutions
come from the honking, the engine and the sound of the
vehicle
itself which often to the point of deafening our ears. It
also
generating
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air
pollutions
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from burning its fuel, and oftentimes, if the
vehicle
users are lazy to
maintenane
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maintenance
their machine, they will level down the engine's performance.
Thus
,
this
behaviour will
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the smoke that came out and
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other
road-riders
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suffer from it. For the water
pollutions
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, I will use an example from Indonesia, which does not have
a
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proper waste management regulations for common folk; oftentimes when changing
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's oil to lubricate the machine, the mechanic will haphazardly
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out the waste into the water body and do not care about the consequences to it at all.
Second
, the usage of private
vehicle
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will generate a lot of gridlocks, especially
in
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rush
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a rush
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hour time. For
the
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example, in Sidoarjo, Indonesia, every morning at rush hour we have to suffer in an atrocious traffic jam and 4 km long of a stressful condition. It does not help that Indonesia's government passed a bill to make private
transportation
more affordable with zero
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percentage, and with how bad the public
transportation's
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system
in
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many
Indonesian's
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city
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,
public
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then
would lean into using more private
transportation
to commute. To summarize,
individual-owned
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vehicle
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should be controlled by the government by making
it
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them
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more expensive to afford and
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restructuring
restructurizing
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restructuring
the
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public
transportation
so people would
using
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it
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them
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more to travel everywhere they want to.
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