More and more people want to buy clothes, cars and other products from well-known brands. What are the reasons? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

In
the
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recent modern society, the number of
people
who are attracted to famous
brands
has been increasing and
this
trend spreads across various
merchandises
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merchandise
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including clothes and automobiles.
Such
global
brands
like Louis Vuitton and Gucci can sell their products with high premiums whereas other
less known
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makers
are forced to lower prices to penetrate among consumers. I believe
this
phenomenon has many drawbacks
such
as creating
social
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divide between the wealthy and the poor. The
first
demerit of too much popularity of
well known
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brands
is its negative
impact
to
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less known
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product
makers
. It is true that high
brand
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brands
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tend to have
high
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high-quality
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quality
materials with unique designs,
however
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,however
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often times other less unknown
makers
' merchandises have similar or equal
quality
as those of high-end
brands
. Regardless, while those
brand
bags and dresses sell at
astonishing
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high prices, good
quality
unknown
brands
should lower their prices to survive.
For example
, in
centre
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of Tokyo, many foreign visitors, mainly from China and other Asian countries are often lining up to purchase Prada wallets, Vuitton bags, and Gucci coats but they have no interest in traditional
high
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high-quality
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quality
Japanese
makers
. As
such
, attaching too much importance to well-known
brands
will have
negative
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impact
to
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national
makers
. The
second
negative
impact
is its creation of
social
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a social
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divide, namely
the
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rich and the less wealthy.
Brand
goods became so expensive
so
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that only a few groups of very wealthy
people
can afford them and the products are becoming
as
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their badge to show that they are rich. It is strange to see many wealthy
people
wearing Italian and French astonishingly expensive shirts and pants,
driving
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and driving
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Italian
car
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cars
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even
they
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if they
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are living in Japan.
On the other hand
, many young
people
cannot buy those high-end products and
wearing
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uniqlo
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Uniqlo
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t-shirts, walking streets filled with Chinese
people
making queues in front of the
brand
shops. As a consequence, too much focus on
brands
may create social confrontations. In conclusion,
although
a good
brand
tend
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to be a promise
for
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of
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good
quality
and security, putting too much importance
to
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it may have
negative
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a negative
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impact
to
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less known good
quality
national
makers
.
In addition
, there is a risk that it may cause social divide
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between
betweent
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between
groups with different financial conditions.
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