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People can eat a wide variety of food of other regions. As a result, they are eating a lot of foreign food instead of locally produced food. Do you think the advantages of eating foreign food are more than it harms? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples of your own knowledge or experience.

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One of the most recent trends in today’s world is the upsurge in eating a lot of food from global cuisine rather than local food. There is a widespread belief that
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 is a popular subject of debate. In my perspective, it has more positive impacts than negative ones. In
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 essay, I will evaluate points based on my opinion. On the one hand, critics may point out some drawbacks. They might argue that purchasing imported food will be expensive because of the extensive distance and high cost of transportation.
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 to that, when foods are transported to another area, it takes several days;
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, they often contain preservatives to keep them fresh, which can be harmful to human health. As an example, customers are expected to buy organic vegetables and fruits, so they are required to deliver them as fresh as possible. For that, alternative measures are used
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 in my stance. Mainly, those who love to savour a diverse array of foods,
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 as Korean, Chinese, Japanese, and Italian foods, can taste them without travelling abroad.
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, people
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 tended to eat from outside
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 their hectic lifestyle, Many restaurants have been opened, which helps create new job
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 for people who are unemployed
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, urbanities are not able to cultivate
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, they face some difficulties with nutrition in daily life, and that issue has been resolved by importing from other regions;
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 circle of imports and exports has been expanded, certain job opportunities have been created to the community, which has been contributed to increase in economic development. In view of the arguments outlined above one can conclude that despite having some drawbacks, the benefits of eating foreign cousins in society are indeed too dire to ignore.
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task response
Ensure that your essay has a clear introduction, fully developed body paragraphs, and a conclusion that summarizes your main points and restates your position.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure your ideas are organized logically, with each paragraph having a clear central topic and all sentences within it being well connected and related to the topic.
task response
Balance both sides of the argument in your body paragraphs, providing specific examples and fully developed ideas to strengthen your points and show a clear position.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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