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Cheaper food is now available because of greater use of fertilizers and improved machinery. This improved production, however, can be harmful to individuals and the community. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view? Discuss, including examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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It is sometimes believed that
fertilisers
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 and other chemicals used to enlarge the capacity of production can be intimidating to both individuals and the community.
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 essay strongly disagrees with
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 suggestion for several reasons. The
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 point given to support my opinion is that it has been a marked development in agricultural science which means the chemicals used in edible
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 have been tested safe for human health.
Fertilisers
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 and pesticides,
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, can be washed off after a period of time when
products
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 are ready to be delivered, thereby it is safe for consumers. The
food
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products
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 are
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 tested again by nutrition experts when arrived at retailers to ensure that consumers are not poisoned. Another reason behind my belief is that cheaper
food
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 is more accessible to the lower-class population. As far as foods are safe to be eaten when using the right amount of
fertilisers
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, they should be massively produced to fulfil people's basic needs. Any
products
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 labelled organic can be priced up to two or three times higher than the original one. As the result, people tend to be reluctant to spend money to buy more healthy
food
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 for their family. In my conclusion, I totally disagree that the use of
fertilisers
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 and improved machinery can be harmful to individuals and the community has given the aforementioned arguments. I entirely disagree with the view because of the development of science in agriculture and easier access to those
products
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 for those who are struggling to buy
food
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.
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