Some people spend large amounts of money to buy tickets for sports or cultural events. Is this a positive or negative development?

Some individuals pay huge amounts of money buying tickets for sports or cultural events. In my

opinion

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has various positive aspects

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because

trough

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attending

sport

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venues adults, adolescents and children reunite and network with each other. While cultural events like entering a museum can expand the

humans

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mind.

First

and foremost paying for and attending

sport

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events like the WM or the Olympics help people to connect and network with each other.

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is

great

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opportunity in a time where too many sit at home in front of their laptops or cell phones not socialising at all. Sporting shows like the WM make females and males come together.

For example

to celebrate and promote their national football team.

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attending a museum will give visitors multiple impressions and valuable

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.

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instance

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they learn about Leonardo Da Vinci´s

Art works

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and expressions

such

as Mona Lisa. These experiences are way more valuable in my opinion

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the high prices which often have to be played.

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many sporting organisations donate their revenues for a good purpose.

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the main reason why tickets are often very pricey.

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these organisations donate their earrings to countries which have

for instance

a high rate of poverty and famine.

Consequently

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this

helps to evolve and strengthen

states

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economy, health and social systems. A good illustration

for

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the WM which gave 70

percent

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revenues to children in Africa and to the government to build new schools and hospitals. In conclusion spending dollars or euros for art or football tickets is not only beneficial because it serves people to network or

gather

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new knowledge, but

also

because many

sport

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organisations use their turnover rates for good purposes.