Write a letter to the hotel manager to make arrangement for hosting a party for one of your friend's. In your letter  tell the manager about the reason for the party Explain what requirements you have As about the availability of facilities and the menu

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
letter to make a request to arrange a party in your hotel
on
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next long weekend, and I think your hotel would be the best place to get all the amenities within a budget. I am going to organise
this
function to celebrate my
friends's
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birthday party as we have separated since we finished our graduation, and now I am coming to surprise him on his birthday. Not only
this
, he has recently got
promotion
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a promotion
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,
therefore
, I think it would be a great time to hang out with him. Since
,
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I trust you and
leaving
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everything
on
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you,
but
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still I have some conditions for you especially in terms of
seating
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the seating
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area, as we were
dissapointed
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disappointed
last
time.
Also
, I want
separate
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banquet hall
along with
proper air-conditioning as summer is approaching, and I would really appreciate your assistance in providing private parking. I think your hotel already has
well experienced
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employees who are very welcoming and friendly, not only
this
, one of my friends has told me about your breakfast meals which
looks
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intruiging
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intriguing
, but still I would appreciate your help in providing me
updated
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menu for all meals, and I cannot wait to attend
this
party with my friend, and I hope your services would not
dissappoint
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disappoint
us. I look forward to your response. Thank you in advance. Yours Sincerely, Amanjot Kaur.
Submitted by amanjotkaur0303 on

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grammar
Your letter is quite effective, but some minor grammatical errors can make the text clearer. For instance, change 'friends's birthday' to 'friend's birthday.'
clarity
Try to avoid run-on sentences by breaking them into shorter sentences. This can make your writing easier to read. For example, break the sentence 'I think your hotel already has well-experienced employees...' into two sentences.
structure
The letter has a clear and logical structure, which makes it easy to follow your points.
task
You have successfully addressed all parts of the question, providing clear reasons for the party and your requirements.
tone
The tone of the letter is polite and appropriate for a formal request.
cohesion
You effectively use paragraphs to separate different ideas, enhancing readability.

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