Many people think that personal happiness is directly related to economic success. Others argue that happiness depends on other factors. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

Some people think that happiness is directly connected to financial

success

while others argue that happiness is related to other

factors

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will state the positive and negative sides and give my opinion.

First

and foremost, as

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said before that

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statement is right but not a hundred

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right. What blocked us to be happy, most of the time is

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because

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economic problem.

Moreover

, at least financial

success

will eliminate one huge factor that can

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us unhappy. With a good economy, people can fulfil their tertiary needs and feed their lifestyle, they can buy food without thinking about the price, and

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they can do what they want.

On the other hand

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of money

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merely the

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that

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us happy, there is still

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part of it like relationships with friends, with family, and so forth that can make us happy too.

In addition

, With a big number in our account but if we do not have friends, family, and someone to lean on

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, the only thing we can feel is loneliness. It happens because on the

first

day we were born, we are social creatures.

Hence

, need to socialize with others in order to survive in

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world, it is mandatory to have someone that can be our ears. From the arguments, what

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can conclude is indeed happiness depends on other

factors

, but financial

success

plays a big role in it. With enough money, we can eliminate a ton of

factors

that can

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us unhappy. And if

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get the opportunity to choose, to be happy

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will prefer to have economic

success

first

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