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DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE WITH THE FOLLOWING STATEMENT? MOST EXPERIENCES IN OUR LIVES THAT SEMED DIFFICULT AT THE TIME BECOME VALUABLE LESSONS FOR THE FUTURE. USE REASONS AND SPECIFIC EXAPLES TO SUPPORT YOUR ANSWER.

#experiences #lives #time #lessons #future #exaples #support
It is true that nowadays people keep
push
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 themselves to get
a
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higher success and fulfil
the
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 dreams. In
this
journey
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 different individuals face various problems and learn
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 of lessons from their own experiences. I strongly agree with the given statement and I prove my statement with some concrete examples. The
first
 and foremost crucial reason, which
support
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 my opinion is
success
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 rate. If a person got the failure,
then
 he or she learned a lesson from the incident and it will be beneficial for
future
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the future
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.
Secondly
, learning a lesson
it
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is good rather than
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 down from the achieved success. To explain it in
details
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,
the
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ford motors rely on the mustang old engine and the company never upgrade the engine with the latest technology
with
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 the present time.
Afterward
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,
entire
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 ford company
sold
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 to
Indian
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an Indian
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 motor company, which is TATA group.
On the other hand
, learning different lessons
are
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 not good for those who got depression
from
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the
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bad time.
Moreover
, some individuals
depressed
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 from their working schedule and some of them attempt
to
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suicide because of their
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workload
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work load
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workload
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. To illustrate
this
, recently in India, a person tried to harm
his self
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himself
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by
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with
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 a knife as well as
he
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tried to jump from
the
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 hotel
also
. Some
journalist
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journalists
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 given
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a statement
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statement
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 that because of his
work load
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workload
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 he tried to kill himself. In a nutshell, I opine that life is the only thing, where people can learn different lessons and warn from
the
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different incidents as well as it will improve the perspective to see the world in other ways.
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