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Task 2 Academic The most important function of music is that it helps people reduce stress. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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stress
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, can be a very effective way, but in my opinion
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 not the most important function that
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 plays in
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 lives. There are several other benefits and aspects of life that
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 can have a big role in it. Listening to
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have
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 a direct impact on our emotions,
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, when we are sad, we either want to feel the melancholy of that moment or we want to feel better and happier. In both
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people
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 often turn to
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 to help them feel what they need to
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 that moment, by listening to sad songs or to
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 tunes.
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 the same logic
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 used in moments of
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,
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 turning to mantras and other soothing
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melodies
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 can really slow your heartbeat, lower your blood pressure and take your mind
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 the reason why you're stressed.
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 a practice
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 used during guided meditation,
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 generally has a calm melody playing in the background of the voice of the meditation guide. There is
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 the fact that
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 is
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 universal language, connecting
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 the world. Even though many times we don't understand the lyrics of foreign songs, the melody itself can provoke different emotions in each person that hears it. Because of that, we can develop affinities and interact with
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 that we normally wouldn't.
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 a very beautiful thing about
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. With that being said, I do
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 that it is
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 extremely important function of
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 to help
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the
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stress
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, it is
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 the capacity of playing with our emotions in several other ways,
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stress reducing
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 being only one of them, the
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 importance of having
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 in our daily life.
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