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some people say that only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language

Some
people
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 think that the only reason for learning a foreign
language
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 is to
travel
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 to or
work
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 in a foreign country,
while
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 others believe that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign
language
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. On the one hand, learning a foreign
language
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 is an effective way to
travel
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 or
work
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 in a foreign country. It helps
people
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 immerse themselves in a different culture and gain a deeper understanding of the place where they live or
work
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.
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, without learning French, it would be much harder to communicate with local
people
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 or learn about the history behind ancient architecture in France.
In addition
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, when
people
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 want to explore local culture in more depth, they usually need to talk to native speakers. Those who were born and raised in the city can provide insights that go far beyond what history textbooks offer.
This
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 means that learning a foreign
language
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 greatly enhances cultural understanding and practical communication when living or working abroad.
On the other hand
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, learning a foreign
language
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 is not only useful for
travel
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 or
work
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. One major reason is for academic and educational purposes. English,
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, is one of the most widely used languages in the world, and in many Asian countries
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 as Taiwan, Japan, and Korea, it is commonly studied for examinations. Achieving a high score in English is usually a basic requirement for applying to universities or overseas programs.
Furthermore
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, learning English can enhance brain development in different aspects of thinking and improve cognitive skills.
This
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 means that foreign languages play an important role in education and personal development, rather than serving only practical needs like
travel
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 or employment. In conclusion,
although
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 some
people
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 think that the only reason for learning a foreign
language
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 is to
travel
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 to or
work
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 in a foreign country, in my opinion, learning a foreign
language
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 influences much more than just the way we think.

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task
Add more clear examples for each point and explain how they help the idea. Keep to short, direct ideas.
coherence
Use simple links to show how ideas connect, for example: first, also, however, in addition.
structure
Check you finish with a clear view that matches the intro.
grammar
Watch grammar and sentence length to avoid hard to read lines.
structure
The essay shows both sides clearly.
structure
It has a clear conclusion.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • multilingual
  • linguistic proficiency
  • globalized world
  • cross-cultural communication
  • immersive experience
  • adaptability
  • cultural exchange
  • interpersonal skills
  • employment prospects
  • empathy
  • intellectual development
  • overcome language barriers
  • global market
  • resourceful
  • life-changing
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