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Task 2 Academic The issue of gay marriage remains controversial. Some people think that this trend has adverse effects on the society while others believe that it is seen as a natural trend and right for people to choose this type of marriage. Should gay marriage be legal?

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Absolutely, everyone should have the right to choose the person they want to share their lives with, as long as
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 relationship is between
two
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 adults and is completely consensual. There are
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several
of
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arguments that
people
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 who are against gay marriage use to try to prove their points,
none
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but none
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 of them sound reasonable enough. It is very common to hear
people
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 preoccupied
by
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 how they are going to explain to their
children
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 something like that, which is a very poor argument considering that even if gay marriage isn'
t
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 legal in some places, gay relationships will continue to exist, since it's a natural thing, and these
children
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 will encounter LGBTQ+
people
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 on the street, on TV, between their family members, friends and all types of places.
People
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 seem often worried
with
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 the
children
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 that the couple may or may not have, saying that it wouldn'
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 be good for the
child
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 to have
two
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 mothers or
two
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 fathers
instead
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 of a mother and a
father
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. A random person actually used that argument on me a few years ago, when a famous
brazilian
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Brazilian
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 singer married another woman. He said that the
children
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 need a
father
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 figure and I asked him if he knew that over five million
people
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 in Brazil don'
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 have their
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father
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 name
in
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on
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 their birth certificate and the reason is
because
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 they abandoned the
child
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 even before they were born, so how come
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 moms that chose to love and
cheerish
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cherish
 that
child
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 are worst than a
father
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 who didn'
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 even
registered
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 the
child
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, let alone took care of the
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? The
last
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 argument that
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also
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 use, with the excuse that they are not against
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gay marriage, they only don'
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 see the point, since
people
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 can be together without getting married, not considering
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that every minute a straight couple is getting married every day, even though they
also
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 don'
t
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 need to. So why some
people
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 should have the right to choose rather they want to get married and others shouldn'
t
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 even have the option?
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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