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Task 2 Academic The issue of gay marriage remains controversial. Some people think that this trend has adverse effects on the society while others believe that it is seen as a natural trend and right for people to choose this type of marriage. Should gay marriage be legal?

#marriage #people #trend #effects #society #right #type
Absolutely, everyone should have the right to choose the person they want to share their lives with, as long as
this
 relationship is between
two
 adults and is completely consensual. There are
a
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several
of
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arguments that
people
 who are against gay marriage use to try to prove their points,
none
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but none
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 of them sound reasonable enough. It is very common to hear
people
 preoccupied
by
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 how they are going to explain to their
children
 something like that, which is a very poor argument considering that even if gay marriage isn'
t
 legal in some places, gay relationships will continue to exist, since it's a natural thing, and these
children
 will encounter LGBTQ+
people
 on the street, on TV, between their family members, friends and all types of places.
People
also
 seem often worried
with
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 the
children
 that the couple may or may not have, saying that it wouldn'
t
 be good for the
child
 to have
two
 mothers or
two
 fathers
instead
 of a mother and a
father
. A random person actually used that argument on me a few years ago, when a famous
brazilian
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 singer married another woman. He said that the
children
 need a
father
 figure and I asked him if he knew that over five million
people
 in Brazil don'
t
 have their
father
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 name
in
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 their birth certificate and the reason is
because
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 they abandoned the
child
 even before they were born, so how come
two
 moms that chose to love and
cheerish
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cherish
 that
child
 are worst than a
father
 who didn'
t
 even
registered
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 the
child
, let alone took care of the
child
? The
last
 argument that
people
also
 use, with the excuse that they are not against
the
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gay marriage, they only don'
t
 see the point, since
people
 can be together without getting married, not considering
it
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that every minute a straight couple is getting married every day, even though they
also
 don'
t
 need to. So why some
people
 should have the right to choose rather they want to get married and others shouldn'
t
 even have the option?
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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