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Academic The issue of gay marriage remains controversial. Some people think that this trend has adverse effects on the society while others believe that it is seen as a natural trend and right for people to choose this type of marriage. Should gay marriage be legal?

Absolutely, everyone should have the right to choose the person they want to share their lives with, as long as
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 relationship is between adults and is completely consensual. There are several arguments that
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 who are against gay marriage use to try to prove their points, but none of them
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 reasonable enough to me. It is very common to hear
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 preoccupied
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 how they are going to explain to their kids something like that, which is a very poor
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 considering that even if gay marriage isn'
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 legal in some places, LGBTQ+ relationships will continue to exist, since it's a natural thing, and these children will encounter
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 of
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 community on the street, on TV, between their family members, friends and all types of places.
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 seem often worried about the children that the couple may or may not have, saying that it wouldn'
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 be good for the
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 to have two moms or two dads
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 of a mother and a
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. A random person actually used that
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 on me a few years ago, when a famous Brazilian singer married another woman. He said that children need to have a
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 figure and I asked him if he knew that over five million
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 in Brazil don'
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 have their
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father
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 name
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 their birth certificate and the reason is that these men abandoned the
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 even before they were born. So I asked him, how come two moms that chose to love and cherish that
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 are worst than a
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 who didn'
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 even
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 the kid, let alone took care of the
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? The
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argument
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 that
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also
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 use, with the excuse that they are not against
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gay marriage, it’s that they only don'
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 see the point, since
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 can be together without getting married.
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,
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, does not
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consider
consideres
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consider
 that straight couples are getting married every day, even though they
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 don'
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 need to. So why some
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 should have the right to choose rather they want to get married and others shouldn'
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 even have the option? I really can’
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find
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find
 one reason they shouldn’
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.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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