Children are facing more pressures nowadays from academic, social and commercial perspectives. What are the causes of these pressures and what measures should be taken to reduce these pressures?
It is commonly said that today’s institutional opportunities, especially in developing countries. Now, more than ever,
children
are pressurized as were yesterday’s adults. That’s true in the sense that Use synonyms
children
are facing harder and harder academic, social and commercial challenges. It is happening simply because of the Use synonyms
ever increasing
demands of life, from the same perspectives, on humans in general. Add a hyphen
ever-increasing
While
it is important that Linking Words
children
excel Use synonyms
in
their age to become successful as adults, they must be shielded from the mounting pressure by maintaining a balance between material and psychological growth. As the global village becomes more and more competitive Change preposition
at
everyday
, it becomes important for us to prepare for the fight, so to speak, earlier and earlier. Replace the word
every day
This
is realized by all, which triggers societies to push their juveniles during their learning stage. The other thing Linking Words
that is
contributing to Linking Words
this
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ever rising
pressure on Add a hyphen
ever-rising
children
is the lackUse synonyms
Change preposition
of
children
are having to race each other Use synonyms
for reaching
the privilege of higher education. Change preposition
to reach
While
healthy competition is helpful for the psycho-social development of young ones, it is rather unhealthy when the race becomes more prominent than the objective. Of Linking Words
course
the objective of Add a comma
course,
children
competing against each other ideally is Use synonyms
Change preposition
to brining
brining
the best out of themselves. But, very frequently, a child is compelled to compete Correct your spelling
bringing
for becoming
better than the other. Change preposition
to become
In other words
, the competition becomes a brawl rather than Linking Words
being
a sprint. To stop Unnecessary verb
apply
such
spiteful struggle among our young, we must first establish a sense of camaraderie within all our developmental institutions, Linking Words
such
as schools and colleges. Students must contest for academic betterment, not social supremacy. Linking Words
Also
, parents should get proactively involved in promoting sportsmanship among learners. They must not allow vile aggressiveness and their own vengefulness in the lives of their Linking Words
children
. To sustain Use synonyms
such
social reformation the government must establish ample alternatives to the traditional route to success. 32 IELTS ESSAY SAMPLES - Band 9 The conclusion here is simple. Linking Words
The
Correct article usage
Children
children
today are being put into a ‘Use synonyms
survival-of-thefittest
’ situation much earlier than they must be when they should really be trying to do their best. Add a hyphen
survival-of-the-fittest
Such
untimely loss of innocence is only going to make civilization more antagonistic. Linking Words
Therefore
we must ensure that personal development may be ushered in harmony and not in vile rivalry.Linking Words
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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