IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 7.5

People now have the freedom to work and live anywhere in the world due to the development of technology and transportation. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

#people #freedom #work #world #development #technology #transportation
Due to the advent of Globalization, it becomes very easier to immigrate to any part of the world. Nowadays, it is seen that due to efficient transportation there is an increasing trend in people to live or work in various provinces apart from their home countries. In
this
 essay, I am going to discuss the advantages
such
 as hybrid culture development and living harmony. We will
also
 discuss some disadvantages like sudden shifts in living and improper work-life balance. The world has now become a Global village, one can easily move from one country to another in a couple of hours via various transportation technologies. In search of better living conditions and higher wages many youngsters are now moving to well-developed countries,
this
 may result in the mixing of various cultures that help us to understand each other better so that there is harmony and peace among children of mother Earth. Recent reports from immigration authorities of fully developed countries, like the USA, the UK, and Canada have seen a large increase in migrants from various parts of the Globe. Whether it is for living or business purposes cross nation migration helps us to build bridges between nations so we will better understand each other.
Although
 there are benefits from technology and global transportation, they
also
 come with some negative aspects. The very
first
 one is that when individual moves to a distant location, whether it is within his/her own homeland or abroad, they may feel homesick due to sudden changes in culture and living standards that may cause mental stress. Apart from
this
, it is hard to settle in new places ,especially for introverts which leads to an unbalanced work-life cycle. To conclude, the positives and negatives of Globalization come hand in hand for individuals as well as for nations. As we have discussed that people will understand or accept various cultures but there is
also
 a risk of cultural shifts that affect the personal life of an individual.
Submitted by abdulalishan123 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: