IN SOME COUNTRIES MORE AND MORE ADULTS ARE CONTINUING TO LIVE WITH PARENTS EVEN AFTER COMPLETING THEIR EDUCATION AND GETTING JOBS. DO THE ADVANTAGES OUTWIEGH DISADVANTAGES

In numerous countries, more
people
after their teenage period prefer to reside with their
parents
after even they graduated from their educational establishment and obtained a career. In my point of view, there are more drawbacks than benefits, since they will face immense efforts in the future and will not manage their deal due to a lack of experience.
First
and foremost, elder
people
who live with their
parents
will be damaged by
life
problems.
Life
is a substantial structure of efforts and only unshakable
people
can manage it,
nevertheless
, independence is the most required characteristic.
Therefore
, if a person desires to gain the best in
life
, he has to make the
first
steps toward self-care.
This
problem is especially eligible in
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countries
countires
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countries
of West Europe, where
life
with biological
parents
even in middle age is considered
as
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a normal
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appearance
appearence
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appearance
,
consequently
, those millions
"children"
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have been a victim of
life
difficulties. According to the London University of Business
researches
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, over 85%
participants
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who used to reside in
"
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the "comfort
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comfort
area" did not own any abilities of daily routine
as
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to clear
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floors,
cook
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a proper meal or even
throw
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trush
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trash
to
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into
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a bin,
therefore
they married in
an
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old age and faced to daily problems.
Secondly
, is an
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insufficient
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unsufficient
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amount of knowledge about real
life
. Everyone should realize that their
parents
will not support them
in
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for
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an endless period.
The death
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is an inevitable process,
additionally
,
people
should be flexible. After the death of
guardians
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pupil
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pupils
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can obtain a heritage from them,
as
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a house or an apartment, notwithstanding, the lack of facilities of
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independence
indepence
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independence
will lead to the same consequences, the loss of anything. To keep a certain real estate in a profitable condition person needs management skills, which he gets when he
leave
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the borders of
comfort
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his comfort
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zone.
For instance
, according to the
researches
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of the
Pensilvania
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Pennsylvania
university of business management, descendants of rich
enterpreneurs
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entrepreneurs
, who could not escape
area
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of
comfort
went bankrupt
their
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parent
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parents
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"s
deal
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deals
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, due to
the
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lack of knowledge.
This
example depicts that
comfort
zone can collapse
humans
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instincts
of
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survive
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. In conclusion, mankind"s psychology depends on
his
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decisions in
life
.
Life
can be demanding or challenging especially for
people
who lived with their guardians and did not receive any
life
abilities. As
45th
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president of the USA Donald Trump said, "
life
won't be kinder to you if you don't even have any survival skills."
This
quote is meaningful, yet
this
problem rapidly increases like wildfire.
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