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There is a trend of increasing amount of noise in our life. Why could this be a problem? What can be done to reduce it? Give your own opinion support it with examples.

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Nowadays, many trends are surging up, one of which is the increasing percentage of
noise
 we hear in our life as
noise
 pollution.
This
 trend can be a
problem
 for our bodies or life and needs to be stopped.
Noise
 is part of our life,
this
 is why human is made with
auditory
 organ like ear so we can hear anything around us. Even communicating with other humans could be considered as
noise
, but there is a blatant boundary on it, which could be harmful or at an okay level for us.
Thus
, from these, problems are starting to arise and become
noise
 pollution. It can be a
problem
 because
this
 could disturb people's peace or mental health, especially if they heard it constantly every day like people who work in a factory without earplugs.
Furthermore
, with the development of audio technology today, we can bring
music
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 anywhere by using
earphones
 and phones. But the
problem
 comes if the earphone user put the sound level to the maximum or uses it religiously every day. There is a proven example of
this
 case when people use
earphones
 too much until it becomes unhealthy because at that point it is
also
 damaging their eardrum and making them almost into
deaf
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 state.
Accordingly
, we could reduce
this
problem
 by following the hearing maximum sound level standard and not using
earphones
 every day.
Moreover
, we have to give our
auditory
 organs a resting time so they can function normally and in a healthier state.
Also
, try to not probe into our ear canal and push the wax deeper, it will close the eardrum and make hearing harder to do. To sum up,
noise
 pollution is proven to be harmful to
auditory
 and mental health. So, to reduce the effects we had to lessen the usage of
auditory
 devices like
earphones
 and not clean our ear canal haphazardly.
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