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With the increase in the use of mobile phones and computers,fewer people are writing letters,some people think that the traditional skill of writing letters will disappear completely.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, due to the improvement in technology, people can write
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, it is often argued that the skill of writing
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 more and more people tend to communicate with friends and colleagues with technological devices, it is my opinion that
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, people like to share their feelings by writing them down on cards or
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 phones and computers to communicate will keep growing, whereas in my view the importance of writing by hand will not be changed and disappear.
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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