Some people say that adversiting is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In today's world,
advertisement
is everywhere to induce us for consuming more. Some
people
believe that
advertisement
has a huge success but
other
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others
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conflict
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statement by saying that
commercials
are so popular and they no longer
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attack
attract
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attract
us.
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both sides of
this
discussion and provide examples. Marketing still has
influence
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an influence
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on
people
to persuade them to buy something.
This
effect causes
people
to buy something, which they have already seen in a commercial, even
they
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don't
dont
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don't
need it or want it.
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makes
people
to
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think, they must have
that
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item which is advertised.
For example
, when individuals see numerous influencers use a product on the Internet, they start to think
like
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they must have that product too, and they buy that item.
This
proves that
advertisement
achieves to be successful.
On the other hand
,
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the advertisement
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advertisement
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might
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be losing
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its
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power, because
people
exposed
commercials
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to commercials
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consistently
consistly
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consistently
and
this
caused ignoring any kind of
sale
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sales
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tactics.
For instance
, if
people
see many
commercials
in
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an online streaming platform, they cancel their memberships because they find the
commercials
irritating.
This
shows that maybe, marketing skills must be changed. From my point of view, persuading
people
through
commercials
still makes its duty and receives its goal.
Moreover
,
advertisement
boosts consumerism in
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society
with
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being overwhelmingly popular.
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we are still looking
commercials
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at commercials
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before buying something. In conclusion,
advertisement
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might divide
the
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society whether it is related to
the
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today's world. In my opinion, its success
outweigh
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outweighs
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the
people
's attention to it.
People
might decide with their experiences.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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