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Many young people today know more about international pop or movie stars than about famous people in the history of their own country. Why is this? What can be done to increase young people's interest in famous people in the history of their country?

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In
this
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 modern era, everyone has elective equipment like mobile, laptops, tablets, and television.
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this
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 equipment influenced
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 in the social. So, many young
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 know their personal details.
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, nowadays disappeared
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 of the
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 is not on social platforms.
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, youngsters do not know the
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 of their own
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 do not know the
history
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 of their own
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. Individuals use social
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 as Facebook, Instagram, Twitter and other social apps.
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, young
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 are influenced by these social apps.
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, recently the Koren band is trending as known as BTS. So many
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 followed them because they use social
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 platforms and increased their followers.
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, google provide all information about a person who is famous
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 as lifestyle, diet, their schedule. So, young
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 know all these things and they think that some stars admire them and followed them in their own life. There are various solutions for young know more about the
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 of their own
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. The
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 of the
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 had written in books. Whereas,
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's interest in reading a book or reading something knowledgeable thing would be decreased.
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, youngsters do not have knowledge of
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. As a solution,
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 books and the
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 of ancient
people
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 convert into video or audio form. So,
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 easily watch videos and know the
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 of the
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.
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, some holy books like The Ramayana, The Mahabharat, and The Gita these part of the book characters performed by
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 in public. In conclusion, nowadays
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 rely on social
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 so, they know the stars who are influenced by social
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.
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, they do not know about
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 because it is in written form.
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, it is written form is converted to video.
As a result
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, younger know about
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