Some people believe that children should be taught a second language at elementary school. What is your opinion?

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Many people believe that elementary

school

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should give their students

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about

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second

language

. I agree

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statement because we are not losing anything or

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any

disadvantage

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when we were studying

second

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language

instead

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it has a lot of

benefit

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, with practice

other

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another language

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at school

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can

also

indirectly improve our intelligence. By studying

other

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another language

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language

, our brain is trained to have a good memory.

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a good impact

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remembering

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things even though at the end of the day we

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the

language

we learned.

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, if a

second

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taught

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at elementary school it means that the children studying since they were young, so they can absorb the lessons quicker than

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adults

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who already

fulfill

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their

brain

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with a bunch of memory.

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that, children should study a

second

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since now we have 2 international

language

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, it is

chinese

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and

english

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. At least we should speak one of these languages. If our mother tongue is

english

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then

we should

practice

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chinese

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and vice versa. Especially if

we're not speak

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these languages in the

first

place, a

second

language

very

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important thing to compete in

this

cruel world.

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for

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instance, my mother tongue is Bahasa which is widely spoken by Indonesian people. Maybe there

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millions

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people

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fluent in Bahasa but it is not

international

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language

, so

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should learn

speaking

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english

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. So in the future, when it comes for me to

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under a company,

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strength

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compared to

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english

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. In conclusion, speaking a

second

language

is a mandatory requirement

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a human in

this

era.

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is moving

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