Many doctors recommend that older people exercise regularly, but most patients do not follow an exercise routine. Why do you think this happens? How can people be encouraged to exercise regularly?
Many doctors advise
pensioners
to do sports
regularly but most pensioners
do not listen to the recommendations. I think this
is due to the fact that people
find sports
very difficult. In order for older people
to practice sports
more often, doctors can arrange special clubs for them and teach simple
physical Correct pronoun usage
them simple
activity
there.
Fix the agreement mistake
activities
Firstly
, older people
are hard to get into sports
because they understand being active as an overwhelming task. Whereas when an older person is advised to do sports
, the most difficult thing is to start exercising. For example
, my grandmother was offered at least 10,000 steps a day. It's easy for her to follow directions, since she goes to physical education three times a week, does gardening, and takes lots of walks. However
, while
my grandfather worked a lot sitting down, which makes it even harder for him to walk as he gets older.
Correct word choice
apply
In addition
in order to increase life (продолжительность), we need to encourage pensioners
to be active. For example
, the state can build special gyms for the elderly. Together with doctors and teachers to
do classes in nature or in the pool. Fix the infinitive
apply
People
need to be shown that doing sports
is not always hard, that it can be fun, and then
health will improve. In this
way
you will be motivated to be more active. After that, life expectancy will increase and retirees will get sick less.
In conclusion, it's hard for Add a comma
,way
pensioners
to start exercising because it seems difficult and incompatible with their lifestyle. Whereas we can fix this
by providing classes in an interesting way for old people
to feel comfortable and confident. This
will help people
be healthier and more active.Submitted by natshar on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite