Many doctors recommend that older people exercise regularly, but most patients do not follow an exercise routine. Why do you think this happens? How can people be encouraged to exercise regularly?

Many doctors advise
pensioners
to do
sports
regularly but most
pensioners
do not listen to the recommendations. I think
this
is due to the fact that
people
find
sports
very difficult. In order for older
people
to practice
sports
more often, doctors can arrange special clubs for them and teach
simple
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physical
activity
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there.
Firstly
, older
people
are hard to get into
sports
because they understand being active as an overwhelming task. Whereas when an older person is advised to do
sports
, the most difficult thing is to start exercising.
For example
, my grandmother was offered at least 10,000 steps a day. It's easy for her to follow directions, since she goes to physical education three times a week, does gardening, and takes lots of walks.
However
,
while
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my grandfather worked a lot sitting down, which makes it even harder for him to walk as he gets older.
In addition
in order to increase life (продолжительность), we need to encourage
pensioners
to be active.
For example
, the state can build special gyms for the elderly. Together with doctors and teachers
to
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do classes in nature or in the pool.
People
need to be shown that doing
sports
is not always hard, that it can be fun, and
then
health will improve. In
this
way
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you will be motivated to be more active. After that, life expectancy will increase and retirees will get sick less. In conclusion, it's hard for
pensioners
to start exercising because it seems difficult and incompatible with their lifestyle. Whereas we can fix
this
by providing classes in an interesting way for old
people
to feel comfortable and confident.
This
will help
people
be healthier and more active.
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