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Some people think that schools are no longer necessary because people can acquire information on the Internet. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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A number of people advocate that schools are not required for
students
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 since they can get information from the internet. I agree with
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 statement and I think that
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 is unnecessary because learners study with
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 dependent on the plan and schedule that the
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 itself compares. Because of
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, for some
students
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 may not be interesting. On the one hand, some
students
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 may be absent
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 moral damage, namely because of harassment. Schools don't even know that they have bullying
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 learners suffer and their education qualities go down. In generale pupils in
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 share for two groups , first who is bullied and the second who gets bullied. Who get bullied do not say
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 to their parents, correspondingly everyone does nothing. Statistically, every third or 52% of
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 are harassed in their
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 and 15% of 52% are silent about it.
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: Canada ranks first in the country, with many people getting bullied at
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. It is obvious that intimidation destroys the lives of others and because of that parents need to protect children from bullying.
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, other
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 dropout of
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 because of their health since they may be suffering from a very rare disease and
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 is coming down to spread. There are many airborne diseases that require homeschooling, but homeschooled kids are more intelligent than kids in schools.
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: In the USA research has shown that academic performance is 15% more for people who studied at home than
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 at
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.
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 I can say that homeschooling has its benefits
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, I strongly believe that homeschooling is more interesting than going to
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 and coming down to plans with a schedule.
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