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Some people believe that violence in the media, such as in television programs and films, directly results in violent behavior. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many people argue that the prevalence of violence in our societies is due to action
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 and web series. I agree with
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 statement that violence and brutality shown in media are mainly responsible for
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 behaviour. These thrilling action
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 inspired many teenagers and grown-ups to be more violent.
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 observed that criminals have not only become more gruesome but they have started to learn and plan their activities through watching
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. Crime reporters revealed that nowadays, goons try to create duplicate scenes in real life. A prime example of
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 a man who killed his whole family after watching a gold digger’s documentary. Scenes of that documentary hypnotized him in
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 a way that he ensured himself that after killing everyone in his family, he will be able to establish his own regime in the entire universe. To put it in a nutshell, I strongly believe that crime-related
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 and dramas are responsible for not only the urge for violence in our societies but
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 for mentoring criminals to plan their activities.
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