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For some people learning in a group is the most effective way. While others prefer one-on-one instruction. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

#people #group #instruction
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all day in the Paris metro station. Overall, there are two picks and one deep drop
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 is in the morning,
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 became four times bigger.
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dropped. The least
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 is at 4 p.m.
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 of people is at 6 p.m with almost 400
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 of metro users significantly dropped to nearly 100.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • collaborative
  • peer support
  • groupthink
  • individualized attention
  • adaptive learning
  • socio-academic
  • pedagogical
  • interpersonal skills
  • customized curriculum
  • self-paced learning
  • cost-effectiveness
  • mentorship
  • cognitive diversity
  • capacity-building
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