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Grades encourage students to work harder at school. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

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The competition is a golden opportunity to work harder not only for the students but
also
 for the whole of society. Some people believe that the ranking system in the evaluation of learning encourages juveniles to learn hard. It is agreed and
this
 essay will discuss it in detail and provide relevant examples to prove it.
Firstly
, the availability of competitors is pushed automatically students to work hard in order to achieve higher ranks because the majority of them like to be at the top among others for pleasure and honour.
For example
, In my school time, we could not wait for the results and
also
 most of the children in my classroom tried to gain even one point by reviewing the answer sheet and requesting from the teacher the possibility to correct ways of some wrong answers.
Accordingly
, It is better to have a ranking system in evaluation methods by tests.
Secondly
, nowadays, it is very difficult to push students for studies without these kinds of strategies. Most importantly, It is harder to get away from them from bad habits
such
 as overusing smartphones for video streaming and online gaming, addiction to drugs and gambling, etc. But these types of encouragements reduce their time to do
such
 kinds of worst activities because if they spend less on academics they will lose their positions.
Therefore
, It is helpful to prevent juveniles from bad habits and addictions. To conclude, the grading system is an effective way to motivate children in their studies as well as keep away them from unwanted harmful things.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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