SOME PEOPLE SAY THAT THE EDUCATION SYSTEM IS THE ONLY CRITICAL FACTOR TO DEVELOPMENT OF A COUNTRY. TO WHAT EXTENT DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE WITH THIS STATEMENT?

Nowadays,
education
is the key to success. Without
it
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no one can easily survive in these surroundings. Some individuals believe that the
education
system is only a factor
to
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development
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of a country. I partially disagree with the above statement.
To begin
,
education
is necessary nowadays, but it is not only a key to
reach
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success. Communities take
education
for earning money. Some
people
are still here who do not take any kind of schooling and,
still
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they are the top richest man in the world.
For instance
, a great cricketer, Virat Kohli” is illiterate, but still he is a famous cricketer all over the world.
Secondly
, there are 1000
of
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people
who do not take schooling and
still
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they earn much more than educated
people
.
For example
, our honourable prime minister Narendra Modi, he is
also
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to a very poor family and for that reason, he has not able to take an
education
,
however
today, he has that much strength to run the country.
On the other hand
, not all
people
have the ability to earn money without an
education
. Sometimes,
education
is crucial for employment.
For instance
, there are some jobs in which,
education
is a must
such
as
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teachers, doctors, government posts and many more. Agglomerating all the above points elaborated, I would like to conclude that for employment,
education
is necessary, but in general life, without
education
,
people
can take success.
In addition
, there are an ample of
people
who are uneducated and still earn much more rather than those educated.
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