Television has had a significant influence on the culture of many societies. to what extent would you say that television has positively or negatively affected the cultural development of your society?

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Nowadays, due to the improvement of technology, more and more useful and creative electronic devices were invented,
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the invention of television.
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, some
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claimed that because of
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invention, there are some drawbacks
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our cultural
developments
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. In my opinion, I believe that
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TV
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has more positive
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effective
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than negative ones. It is often argued that watching
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is an activity that causes
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to get
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. The reason is that
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leisure activity can really let
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escape from the
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world not only
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children but
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adults. Whereas,
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situation will increase the antisocial and isolated problems. The whole society may be influenced by
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because the
inhabitats
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inhabitants
are more likely to spend
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watching programs or playing switch on
TV
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of communicating with their
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.
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, the program
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TV
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the TV
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sometimes will
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too
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violence
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violent
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or
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inappropriate
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for children. If parents don't pay attention,
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the kids might imitate the bad
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which they saw on
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. Despite these negative effects, there are still many
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benefit
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who benefit
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from
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creation.
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, they can gain worldwide and various
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knowledge
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by watching
news
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the news
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or many kinds of
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programs.
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, we can easily achieve new things in
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interesting way
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of reading in the library boringly.
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, it can help
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to release their stress. Because of the heavy work and economic stress, more and more workers feel unhappy and
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. But after work, they can share
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with their family by watching some movies or cartoons together. Overall, television is really convenient and is a good product for
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to use during their leisure
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. In conclusion, the invention of
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is a
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sword.
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, I think there are more benefits and positive effects than
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negative sides as long as we should not watch it all the
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.
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