Some people think that schools do not do enough to teach young people about how to look after their health. To what extent do you agree or disagree.
Some people consider that nowadays,
schools
pay great attention to teaching students
about knowledge and skills and thus
ignore how young people tackle the issue of their health
. Personally, I completely agree with this
point because a good body plays a vital role in both our family and career.
There are some reasons and examples that explain why schools
and teachers have not done enough to take care of students
' health
. For instance
, it is a common phenomenon that students
are excepted to get good grades in school and thus
they can receive a position in elite colleges. For this
, teachers attempt to teach the young about knowledge and skills and help them pass the entrance examination. As a consequence, the course, guiding students
to take care of their health
, has been ignored. For example
, in China, PE lessons tend to be cancelled in high schools
in order to dig out more time for learning other lessons such
as math, chemistry and science, which improves the possibility of entering a university.
In my opinion, we should be aware that young people also
need abundant knowledge about healthcare and their health
, the importance of which is equal to other lessons in schools
. There is no doubt that a strong body plays an essential role in our life. From a personal aspect, a healthy condition helps us stand out in the masses of future competitions, particularly in our careers. From a social perspective, the improvement of students
' health
is beneficial to mitigate the pressure on the local medical system and reduce the government budgets for medical fields. Thus
, teaching students
in schools
about how to consider their health
condition is absolutely a positive development.
In conclusion, I agree with the idea that some schools
ignore the guidance of students
' health
, which is important from both individual and social perspectives.Submitted by 1998v7 on
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