Some people argue that governments should make laws regarding people’s nutrition and food choices to improve public health while others contend that this is the freedom of personal choice and responsibility. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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believe that

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choices

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and their citizen's

nutrition

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that needs to rule by the government. Whereas other

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tend to argue

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should be a freedom of private choice and responsibility.

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explanation regarding the issue will

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in the essay.

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laws

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what

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should eat may become interesting.

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of the

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is it will be a good solution to avoid malnutrition problems in a country

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because if they disobey the rule they will

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.

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, everyone will encourage

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to maintain their

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.

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,

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laws

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the wealth level in society.

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is because

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choices

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likely the same both for the poor and the rich. And it is the responsibility

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the government to

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suitable needs, especially for the poor.

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, groceries which sell in the market may have the same variety in each store in terms of

nutrition

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laws

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tend to eat similar menus either in a big or small house.

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, rules about someone's

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preparation may not suitable for every person.

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is something that cannot be the same for everyone.

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choices

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and

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for

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person

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the same for others by the reason of different body

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meals

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law is the lack of variety of

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and beverage businesses. It is a result

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strict

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materials according to the

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. To illustrate, there will be no

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of fast

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business because

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consider

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as

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unhealthy. And the bad impacts of

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can affect the economic growth of a country. In conclusion,

people

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nutrition

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and

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choices

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may seem

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an interesting solution to improve public health.

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negative effects

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people

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within the country.