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Some people believe that social media sites, such as Facebook or Twitter, have a negative impact on young people and their ability to form personal relationships. Others believe that these sites bring people together in a beneficial way.

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in recent year, using social
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 to share lifestyle seem like a modern trend.
people
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 especially the young generation use social
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 a lot. but many
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 believe that
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 is harmful and prevents us to have relationships in real life.
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, some
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 get benefit from social
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. as a human,society we cannot lives without making a connection with the world around us,
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teenagers
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 often spend their time on social
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. but in recent times social
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 become worsened ,
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, bullying, some
teenagers
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 have sent hate comments to other users of social
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, and the case often happens and
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 of
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 is victim lead depression. the other things are fake news, hoax which is harmful to
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 who believe that thing is really happening
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 sending donation which that money can help
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 who needed
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 social
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 can make
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 with the same interests
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connect and they can share anything ,
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, news, the story
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 recipes from
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 in different countries.
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 we can get much information from social
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 which helps
teenagers
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 to think broader away and more.
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,
teenagers
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 have a lot of inspiration to apply in real life. social
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 can lighten the stress after work hours. in summary,
people
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 who use social
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 need aware of any kind of scam and prevent themself from bullying. use wisely information that we get and share it with other
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 in real life. in my view, social
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 bring more benefit to us.
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