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SOME PEOPLE THINK THAT IT IS MORE BENEFICIAL TO TAKE PART IN SPORTS WHICH ARE PLAYED IN TEAMS, LIKE FOOTBALL, WHILE OTHERS THINK THAT TAKING PART IN INDIVIDUAL SPORTS, LIKE TENNIS OR SWIMMING, IS BETTER. DISCUSS BOTH VIEWS AND GIVE YOUR OWN OPINION .

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 is argued that people who engage in team
sports
such
 as basketball or volleyball will gain a lot of advantages. Others believed that it is more beneficial when attending personal
sports
 like golf or bowling. I suppose that it is better to participate in team
sports
. There are many reasons to support the idea that playing
sports
 in groups has many advantages.
First
 of all,when people join clubs or teams,they might make a lot of new friends and help them feel comfortable when talking with others in teams. They develop teamwork skills and
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 skills.
For instance
, my husband plays soccer with his colleagues when he finishes work twice a week, which makes him relax a lot.
Second
 of all, They promote a sense of competition , which means that they need much effort not to lag behind in the team.
As a result
, they could improve themself
everyday
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.
On the other hand
, some people think that taking part in solo
sports
 is more beneficial.
Firstly
, they are not dependent on anybody when they want to play it. Another reason is that they can have the opportunity to develop independence and
besides
that
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 they make an effort to win by
themselve
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themselves
 when they are being lazy. In inclusion, there are pros and cons of each kind of
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 so it depends on the personality and choice.
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  • cooperation
  • team spirit
  • sense of belonging
  • community
  • leadership
  • trust
  • collective responsibility
  • dependency
  • self-reliance
  • self-discipline
  • goal setting
  • tailored development
  • flexibility
  • social support
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