In some countries, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the adventages and disadvantages of giving children this message.

In some nations , children are taught about they can become successful in every task if they try hard sufficiently. Hard work affects children in many ways . In
this
essay, I will discuss the pros and cons of giving offspring
this
massage. ,
First
I'll explore about advantages of studying hard and
then
I'll explain what is the disadvantage of hard learning. On the one hand, some people are told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. There is some thought in that. Because when we do something the
first
time it may be not successful. But we should not worry about that. We can do it again.,
Finally
we can be successful. Trying is the best solution for achieving our life goals. There is
also
a saying " Try and try one day you can fly".
For example
, there is a boy who face an
exam
last
year. But he didn't pass the
exam
at
this
time. But he didn't leave his achievement. He works hard and faces the
exam
this
year. His efforts paid off. He passed the
exam
with "flying colours".
On the other hand
, there is
also
a bad side to hard
study
.one of the most significant drawbacks of hard
study
is the damage to their mental health, like stress, and depression. When we
study
hard sometime it's not successful.
Then
they taught that's their fault. So they think about that much more. It affects their brain badly.
Furthermore
, they try to spend their time alone. They might have anti-social behaviours.
As a result
, teachingttyinghard enough to student achieve their goals
study
hard is a good habit. But sometimes it affects children in a bad way.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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