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Students today can easily get access information online, so libraries are no longer necessary. Do you agree or disagree?

#students #access #information #libraries
As technology has improved through the years, the
internet
 is an important part of many
people
’s lives today.
As a result
, there is great access to
information
that is
 based on the
internet
, and
students
 can find out about them online.
Although
 I believe that finding
information
 online makes it easier for
students
, I don’t think it can replace
libraries
. It would be hard for me to believe if someone said that there will come a day when there is no use for
libraries
 and that the
internet
 took over
it
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 completely. Because
first
 of all,
libraries
 are not just about reading through
books
 or borrowing them to find
information
 about a specific subject; it is
also
 a place where
people
 go in order to get detached from the outside world and focus on a book they want to read severely. I would call that a comfort zone for many
people
.
Also
, many
students
 go to
libraries
 as a place where they can concentrate on what they are studying.
For instance
, when I was studying at university, I found a high majority of my classmates in the library because they wanted to study well for exams.
That is
 something that can not be replaced by the
internet
.
Secondly
, the
internet
 provides
people
 with a lot of
information
, but it sometimes contains false
information
 which can not be trustable. In order to choose the correct resources,
students
 must search for scholars’
books
 and ideas online, which may not be a complete version of the book but only a summary. And
also
, scientific
books
 and
information
 that are needed
for
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students
 have high prices most of the time and they have to pay to get access to them. While reading
books
 and finding them in
libraries
 are usually free or may cost a very low entry fee. In conclusion, the online
information
 on the
internet
 and the
books
 collected in
libraries
 are two separate things that can not be replaced by each other.
Although
 the fast pace of reaching data online makes
students
’ jobs easier, it can not be an alternative to the comforting environment and the feelings of touching, smelling, and reading paper
books
 bring to
people
, especially
students
. And, the costs of reading
books
 or borrowing them from
libraries
 are more reasonable.
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