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Some people opine that cinema will eventually lose its appeal to mass people and very few people will go to cinema halls. Do you agree or disagree with this view?

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In
this
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 modern world, more and more
people
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 would like to watch movies on their own smartphones and laptop with the help of online platforms
such
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 as Netflix and Amazon Prime so some groups of thinkers believe that in the future cinemas will lose their impression on
people
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 who watch movies in the theatre. I strongly agree with
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 statement and I will explain my views in a
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 essay.
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 with, nowadays everyone has their own busy schedule so no one has enough
time
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 to watch a movie in the cinema so that
people
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 think that they will see
this
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 film on the OTT platform on their smartphone rather than going out for a movie. One research conducted by The Times of India found as compared to 2012 now only 20% of
people
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 who like to watch films in the cinema has decreased by more than 50%.
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, it is
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 the fact that the cost of theatres is too high and
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 projection that it will hike in future so middle and lower class
people
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 can not prefer to go out for a movie quite frequently. The online see films only a
time
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 in a quarter.
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, newly released movies can be available online within a short
time
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 period so
people
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 are waiting for that rather than spending more amount on theatres. In conclusion, the number of
people
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 will decrease in future who would to like watch a film in cinemas is due to not only having a
time
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 limit but
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 having an issue with money.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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