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In many countries today, crime novels and TV crime dramas are becoming more and more popular. Why do you think this? What is your opinion of crime fiction and crime dramas?

#countries #crime #novels #tv #dramas #fiction
people
 of all ages and places love suspicious and curious shows. Even
drams
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 and novels
now a days
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nowadays
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 can not get away with the
crime
 content being included in them because it makes the rating of the show significantly high and is profitable for the directors and producers. which could be the reason
of
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 their popularity,
however
, In my opinion, these types of scripts are creating nothing but anxiety in our viewers, especially
the
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housewives. These shows are more popular than
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normal love story
dramas
 because
people
are seem
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 to be addicted
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.
moreover
, producers and directors of
such
dramas
 try to make the program on air every week so that
people
 will be waiting for what happened
next
 and their
rating
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ratings
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 will go up by simply making it more suspicious. We know that
people
 have
this
 instinct of knowing what is hidden and these drama productions are very well aware of
this
 fact. They usually take advantage of
people
's innocence and
creat
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create
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such
contents
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content
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 to make money. Television
dramas
 and shows are the only source of entertainment for
stay at home
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 women and they usually spend their
time
 watching all shows during the day. It is often observed that these women are more depressed than the working ones. It could be because of the content, which is often
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crime
 scene investigation
dramas
 or
real life
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real-life
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 horror stories, of the present industry. They are observed to only care
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about
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 the rating of the channels and that could be a reason
of
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 allowing
the
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crime
 fiction and
dramas
 on
air
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.
For example
, many TV channels use the prime
time
 by showing
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crime
investigations oriented
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investigations-oriented
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dramas
 and programs. I think
,
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such
 programs should not be
on
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aired in the evening but only at night
time
 and should use the prime
time
 for more
family oriented
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family-oriented
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 content like live stories or other common interests.
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