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One of your neighbour's children has accidentally broken the front windows of your car . You should write a letter to his/her parents and in your letter you should Introduce yourself Explain how it happened And what they should do

#neighbour #children #front #windows #car #parents
Ďear sir or madam I am your neighbour
who
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Lobar Suyunova inhabits close to your home . I am writing to
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a complaint
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complaint
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 you rely on your children's problems . I and you are very friendly joneses .
Definitely
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 I have resided for a long time there
that is
 Termiziy street .
However
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 by
then
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 there have not been any complications relevant to each other as well as our own things .undoubtedly
i
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 believe that we always respect each other .
Nevertheless
 one day my
car
 was staying
my
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 yard
that
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 I
have
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purchased a new red
car
 from an auto
car
 recently.it was very marvellous .
Then
 your children visited my home in order to view it. I permitted them.
Unfortunately
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 they broke
windows
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 of my new
car
 by accident . They were gazing at that condition .
As a
result
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 I was shocked
although
 now I am sure they have been regretting
from
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their error till. So I wish that you did not shout at your children as well as you should not reprove them .undoubtedly they have given their conclusion from that
badly
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 position so I am not annoying them nowadays .
Definitely
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 if you compensate my new vehicle . I will accept your
aids
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with
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 being cheerful . Thank you for your attention Yours sincerely Lobar
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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