Some people say the main way to be happy in life is to have a lot of money. How might having a lot of money make people happy? What other things in life can make people happy?

In today's society, the majority believe that being rich is the key to
stay
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happy. In fact, finances provide you
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opportunities and
comfortable
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lifestyle
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the other hand, we have more
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things that make
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happier, it is close
people
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family and friends. It is obvious, at present you can't survive without a strong cash flow.
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to live comfortably, all you need is to have a rigid income. If you are financially stable you can easily afford a luxurious life and it is so uncomplicated to achieve your targets too.
For instance
, if you are wealthy enough,
then
you can purchase a villa close to the beach or on a private island which makes you extremely satisfied and happy for the entire lifetime by treating yourself as a king with a load of joyful activities that you could do.
However
, even though you are a billionaire, there are some other facts that you can't afford by paying cash. Being rich might not be a help if you suffer from an incurable disease and it will lead to becoming miserable.
Furthermore
, there are a lot of situations in which money cannot make you live like a perfect person.
For example
,
although
you bought a castle or villa and if you do not have a family or a close set of friends to share your thoughts or happiness
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will feel alone and your life becomes so monotonous
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also
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being not mentally stable will not add glow to your soul. So
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, it is necessary to think about a balance between physical and mental
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. To conclude, it is acceptable that being a rich person can lead to having a luxurious life. But there are many more other reasons, which we should not forget, especially the spiritual and psychological facts to make a person so joyful and delighted.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Financial security
  • Basic needs
  • Comfort
  • Luxury
  • Freedom
  • Altruistic
  • Philanthropy
  • Nurturing relationships
  • Fulfillment
  • Sense of accomplishment
  • Physical well-being
  • Spiritual beliefs
  • Community involvement
  • Gratitude
  • Mindfulness
  • Simple pleasures
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