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Technology is destroying social interactions. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#technology #interactions
The impact of technology on our well-being is significantly obvious and evident these days. Even it has influenced our social structure and commitments. I agree with the statement because after the revolution in technology, we are no longer able to connect and socialize with our family and friends as before.
Also
, what used to be places of social gatherings, events, and interaction like the library and universities, are now replaced by virtual and digital worlds. Our social life is limited to media like Twitter, Facebook, and youtube now.
People
 do not feel the need to meet their friends, family, and relatives in person but rather prefer to connect with them online. They are missing the opportunity to stay away from gadgets and experience the gatherings and social interactions which are unlikely to replace by other means.
For example
, many of us have long of followers and
people
 whom we are following, while
the
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 short circle of friends and family.
Although
 technology has digitalised and virtualised our institutions like libraries and universities, which had never happened in the past. Now
people
 can access
library
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 and can attend class online which influence
people
 physically going
in
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 these institutions and
have
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 a
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 time, away from the hustle of life in a calm environment.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • virtual interactions
  • weaker social bonds
  • isolation
  • mental health
  • anxiety
  • depression
  • shallow relationships
  • reduced empathy
  • nuances of emotional expression
  • counterargument
  • physically unable
  • cross-cultural exchanges
  • interpersonal skills
  • communication technology
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