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Some members of your city council want to prohibit cars on several downtown streets. This will allow pedestrians and bicyclists to use the roads freely. Write a letter to a city council official in your city. In your letter Explain how you heard about the plan Provide some possible effects of this plan Give your opinion about the plan

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Dear Sir, I am writing
this
 letter to inform you about my personal position
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 the new prohibition expose
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 the local government website yesterday. When I hear from
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 way that you want to manage traffic in downtown
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our city, I felt so confused,
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 some disagreement about that, because I think
that is
 the worst decision in the actual administration. Above all, the downtown and city trade centre needs full access to vehicles, that initiative would not permit commercial development in
this
 area,
on the contrary
, will stop the good work of many companies that are established actually in their place.
On the other hand
, please take care of your employees that need efficient transport all weekdays all the time. To conclude, I think
that is
 the worst decision over transit laws and city order and claim to stop early that idea, before taking awful effects on our economy
also
 local businesses that need all governmental support. Best Regards, Eduardo
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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