More and more measures to improve the security in the urban areas have been introduced because of the increasing crime. Do the benefits of measures overweigh the drawbacks.

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Nowadays, crimes are increasing
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speed as people or abducting from their surroundings. It is often argued that the government should install more and more security services which would help them to overcome crimes. In
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the benefit that
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would receive and their drawbacks. To commence with, I believe that it is a good idea of the executive to take measures to improve security in urban areas as it would give various benefits to
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inhabitants of that place. They would feel more secure
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out with their families and leaving their
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every house should install
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, due to
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, every person would be under observation and if anybody would do something wrong,
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, they would be watched by it.
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the government should install cameras in
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area of the town so that everybody would be under surveillance.
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, there are various drawbacks of
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service as
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would feel that they are being seen by other people.
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, the
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relaxed which can result in some kind of negligence. The population would not
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attention and keep their doors open at night. To illustrate, according to the survey conducted by The Times of India, it was found out that there are 75% of
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do not lock their doors at night because they think that cameras are being installed in the locality. To conclude, I am firmly convinced by the view that the authorities should take measures to reduce crime but people should not take that facility for granted and they should
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become vigilant too.

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