Our personalities are predefined as a result of our genes before we are born and there is nothing can be done to change our character traits. To what extent do you agree?

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's personalities are reclarified thanks to their DNA codes before they are born, meanwhile, neither effect which comes
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cannot change, I strongly believe that
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development
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of character. On
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hand, there is a belief about personality
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influenced by our genes and
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cannot be altered as
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how
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to changing their personalities.
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of DNA codes.
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, the most significant element for determining the individuals’ personalities is
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how
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educate them because when a person
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, he is like a white paper. His parent's pencils define the how
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will be at the end of the drawing.
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decisive factor in
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of the famous pedagogues in Turkey, resembles
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and children to
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have a big role in the improvement of
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trait
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. In conclusion, whether personality is an inborn gift, or it can be affected by outside remains
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that individuals
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young ages (0-10) can be shaped by their
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