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Some people think secondary school students and high school students should be allowed to choose academic courses leading to university or practical Courses leading to careers such as carpenters. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The current education system in most countries is based on the belief that high
school
students
 are often encouraged to focus on practical
courses
such
 as carpentry or auto repair, while
students
 interested in academic pursuits are funnelled into "college prep" programs. I agree that secondary
school
students
 can make their own choices within certain constraints. Allowing children to make their own choices will have many benefits for their future development.
Students
 who are good at math or science may find themselves drawn towards a career in engineering or medicine because of these academic
courses
 and be given the opportunity to pursue
further
 study at university. Those who are not academically inclined will
also
 be able to acquire a vocational skill through a practical course that will enable them to work and earn an income after graduation. And in terms of learning outcomes, by allowing
students
 to choose the areas in which they excel, they are willing to put more effort into their studies, which
also
 helps them to achieve better results.
However
,
this
 approach has a number of drawbacks. Due to their young age and lack of experience, secondary
school
students
 are not mentally mature, leading to a lack of consideration in their decisions. We
also
 neglect the fact that By encouraging
students
 to focus on practical
courses
 that lead to careers, we fail to prepare them for other kinds of employment later in life.
Therefore
, parents and teachers need to be more involved in the selection process. They can help
students
 make more appropriate curriculum choices based on their rich experience and understanding of children. In conclusion, the point of secondary and high
school
 is to prepare
students
 for the future. There is no reason why they should not be able to choose the
courses
 that best prepare them for their future, whether
that is
 a practical or an academic course.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-direction
  • personal interest
  • educational engagement
  • learning outcomes
  • job market
  • skills-based economy
  • academic qualifications
  • personal aptitude
  • labour market needs
  • efficient workforce
  • foundational knowledge
  • specialize
  • well-rounded individuals
  • student-led course selection
  • socioeconomic disparities
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