You are interested in attending a training course abroad but require financial support to do so. Write a letter to the education department requesting financial assistance. In your letter: - Introduce yourself - Describe the training course and how it would benefit your work - Explain why you need financial assistance.

Dear Sir/Madam I hope
this
email finds you well. I am a junior employee in the mechanical department under the supervision of Mr. John. My employee ID is 3755 and I have been working for two years. I am writing
this
letter to a request for an employee training program scheme, a pilot project by the federal government for advancement in the Mechanical engineering sector.
This
is a 4-week long program in England which would benefit the learner to understand the new technology of the NV5 machine. Our company is planning to purchase a new tool manufacturing machine,
this
course
would help me understand its programming and working and increase our proficiency and production.
Further
, I would request you to assist me with my
course
fees and expenditures. As a junior worker, it's difficult for me to bear these expenses and I have a family of three members to support.
This
course
would not only benefit me but
also
increase the company's potential. I would be able to teach other employees after the
course
which would cut the
overall
cost of training the fellow workers. I hope to hear from you soon. Your's
faithfully
Replace the adverb
faithful
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, Amarjot Kaur
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grammar
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cohesion
Introduce transitional phrases for stronger cohesion between paragraphs.
tone
The letter is polite and uses a suitable formal tone throughout.
organization
The structure is well-organized with each relevant point clearly addressed.

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You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial assistance
  • professional development
  • enhance skills
  • tuition fees
  • travel expenses
  • accommodation
  • current role
  • directly related
  • performance at work
  • organization
  • burden
  • opportunity
  • institution
  • skills and knowledge
  • benefit
  • related costs
  • attendance
  • support
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