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In many cities many people are living alone What are the reason for it? Is this a positive or a negative?

#cities #people #reason
Nowadays, living solo is now a trend among
the
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people
 and there are multiple factors that
influencing
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 them to live alone. In
this
 essay, we will discuss the reasons behind it with
real
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life
 examples followed by its effect on
thier
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their
 own
life
.
Firstly
, there are ample
of
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benefits which a
person
 can get by
suviving
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surviving
 alone
such
 as mental strength,
independent
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, and can focus very sharply. To exemplify,
living
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the living
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 solo will give
person
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a person
the person
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 an extensive idea about how to stand on
thier
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their
 own, no matter what
situation
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the situation
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 is which leads to growth in mental abilities.
Secondly
,
Individual
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 can take any kind of decision without any pressure since it can not be easy if a
person
 is living with family because he may have to consider his mates before any decision he makes. In 2013,
survey
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a survey
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of
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by
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 Harvard business school discovered that
people
 who are habituated to
live
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 alone are having good
decision making
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 skill than
who
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those who
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 prefers to live with family or friends. Financial stability can
also
 be an imperative reason to live a
life
 as a solo. To
eleborate
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elaborate
, living with family gives
certain
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 kind of burden since you have to spend money
for
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on
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 multiple
people
 which leads to no
saving
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 at all.
On the other hand
, living alone will give you a better grip to restrict your budget because a
person
 can spend according to individual needs only.
In addition
, there will be no one who stops them to buy what
their
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 want. In the survey of Canadian banks, it has been proven that
people
 who are living alone have 25% more savings compared to the
familyman
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family man
. To conclude, there is nothing to lose if a
person
 is living alone
can
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and can
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 focus on their own
life
 without any interference which makes them a strong individual with all positive changes.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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