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Nations should spend more money on skills and vocational training for practical work, rather than on university education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#nations #money #skills #work #university #education
Before
this
, People often focused on higher education but it is only theory and rarely
practice
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. In my opinion , I suppose that countries should invest more financially
on
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 skills and occupation coaching for practical work. To some
extent
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 I agree with
this
 statement and I have some reasons below.
First
 of all, mostly, university students have to borrow money from the government to study
education
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.
This
 is a lot of burden and pressure on them. While training school is cheaper, faster and easier looking for jobs.
For instance
, people who only through about 6 or 8 months to learn about nail medicare,
then
 they can apply for a job immediately.
Moreover
, Nowadays, nations in the world lack blue-collar workers
such
 as chefs, workers at farms and staff at hotels.
Furthermore
, those people have an early career without debt, which helps them be happier and helps them save money to set up their families. But everything has pros and cons.Owning a graduate degree has many benefits
such
 as big companies often
choose
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 applicants who are completely done at university . Without a university
degree
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 there might rarely be chances of promotion in the future and they might receive a lower rate of salary
with
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in
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 the same position than those who had graduated. In conclusion, I strongly believe that states in the world should provide more money for vocational teaching to improve and develop it.
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